The Climb
After being crushed,
darkness envelopes.
Fear grips.
Hope invisible.
Just knowing,
life matters.
New openness,
praying quietly,
reaching, staggering
toward understanding.
Voices whisper,
x-hale...
your Zenith.
After being crushed,
darkness envelopes.
Fear grips.
Hope invisible.
Just knowing,
life matters.
New openness,
praying quietly,
reaching, staggering
toward understanding.
Voices whisper,
x-hale...
your Zenith.
For examples of other ABC poems, far better than mine- check out the link above to Slouching Mom.
13 comments:
Wow, Lori. That's a great poem. I'm too intimidated by the challenge.....
Nice job, Lori! I've linked it.
Wow! I feel like this poem is about my life. This really moved me in a way few things have lately. I'm printing it out to tape to my wall at work.
Great! This is one challenge I am thoroughly enjoying as it makes the rounds.
Very, very nice, Lori. I think that cheating bit is OK, especially since the graphic representation of that word the way you have it somehow seems very fitting for the poem.
The little bit of time by ourselves sure does wonders, doesn't it? I came up with most of mine today while getting ready for and taking a shower. :)
Lori-I think this is absolutely phenomenal. It makes mine look like it was done by a 4th grader. I wouldn't even have noticed that all the letters are consecutive, it flows so naturally. You are very gifted in this manner of expression. And I'm not just saying that because we used the same last two words. :)
"praying quietly, reaching, staggering toward understanding."
Gorgeous. I feel this everyday in some ways.
Wow. Very good poem. You definitely lived up to the challenge (which I have yet to get the guts to try)!
These poems are amazing. I just came from reading Julia's entry and I love that they are all so different--but all really well done.
That's terrific!
Joy of Course is absolutely right. The words do sound so natural and unforced. I find that's one of the hardest things to do -- to conceal how hard it was to accomplish something and make it look easy and effortless. You've certainly done that here.
wow, Lori...exhale indeed. no matter how you spell it, this did come off as natural and effortless and still managed to capture the feeling of one of the hardest processes i've ever been through.
lovely.
Wow... thanks all. I am incredibly humbled by your compliments. I hate to say it, but perhaps it sounds fairly effortless, because it was. It really did just come to me, and I wrote it in less than 10 minutes. Sometimes, the words just come.
You are brilliant!
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